Darswords

Neveah A Broken Forever by Angie Merriam
My rating: 4 of 5 stars

I have to admit to vacillating between three and four stars. If it were on story alone it might rate five stars but there were so many things I had a hard time with. The beginning is way too romantic and gushing without my even caring about the couple. That goes on for SO many chapters. I would have liked to see Lilly and Shep separately grow into strong individuals of their own right before anything else happened. That didn’t happen much. The good part of the first few chapters was a feeling that editing had taken place.

Please remember, I do love the story and eventually almost all the characters. But there were so many holes in the plot. War? What war? Only strongest together but rarely together. Both seem to have the same talents, so how could they be stronger? And Who are you, Ms. author? George R.R. Martin? You have killed off some important characters here. (Just kidding.) Okay, I understand that you have a couple more books to follow this one, and I will read them to see what happened.

I got this book free from the author through Libboo for an honest review. And Libboo is a lot of the problems. I think it is their formatting that made the book lose all paragraphs and threw the reading process into the sewer. Interrupting the flow of story to hear the commercial was as bad as commercials on television. If you think that keeps the reader/watcher engaged you need to watch real people. We record things to avoid commercials. While reading something for Libboo I tend to go read an email while I waited (ADD, here) and by doing so I miss the first sentence or two of the next chapter. Often the commercial falls in such a way that I had to go back and reread the last couple lines of the story. Wouldn’t the commercial at the beginning and end of the book be sufficient to remind the reader where the book came from?

Again, I need to say, I did love the story. Yep, there’s another but… If you read like I do using text-to-speech, you find a lot more errors that by reading silently. Many words had spaces in them, such as, ‘s he’. I read along with the robot voice so I see the errors. But if I had been driving or been busy multitasking those would have led to misunderstandings much greater. I was a little worried about misspellings when in the acknowledgements the author thanked her editors for ‘thier’ help. I assumed that they didn’t get to read the acknowledgements before the book was published. From the middle out toward the end the errors increased as the story got more exciting.

Story is why I still haven’t downgraded the star rating. I couldn’t stop reading. And it will lead me to get book two to see what happens. Thank you for letting me read this fun book.

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