I liked E.J. Runyon’s ideas here. Thought I’d share.
You can begin your first draft like this:
Joseph stood on her front porch but didn’t knock. The wind as it was coming from the east, made his eyes squint.
She opened the door. Saw him there, and she nodded and smiled.
In one way, it’s a nice way to start. You aren’t over using state-of-being verbs, like was or were, or the helpers words like as and had been, too much.
The verbs here are stood, knock, was, coming, made, squint, opened, saw, nodded, and smiled. But it is a lot of stage direction for the wind, Joseph and someone named she.
ON second glance, you have to admit, these lines are mostly story facts. The ‘Where folks are’, the ‘What they did, movement wise’. There’s not a lot of storytelling here yet.
We aren’t given many suggestions about anyone’s emotions, or motivations, there’s…
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